Craft check: after the blow lands, what does your character do next?
Many drafts pile the next shove on shock. One beat of reaction — a choice, a silence, a wrong turn — lets readers feel it.
Where does your draft rush past the bruise?

Craft check: after the blow lands, what does your character do next?
Many drafts pile the next shove on shock. One beat of reaction — a choice, a silence, a wrong turn — lets readers feel it.
Where does your draft rush past the bruise?